WHA Haiga Contest
The 116th Contest (01/2014)
new
year again
a
boy mounts the horse
on
carousel
nouvel an de plus
un garcon monte à cheval
sur le carrousel
znowu nowy rok
chłopiec dosiada konia
na karuzeli
ismét új év
fiú felül a lóra
körhintán
I think you need an article in line 3 of the English version. Good moment, in any case.
OdpowiedzUsuńHi Bill,
UsuńYes, I know that placing an article in line 3 is grammatically correct but is it indispensable? I was considering this while writing haiku because I had observed a lot of haiku without any article or just ommited some of them. Thus for me the whole haiku is more smooth and almost like a marry-go-round because there is no break for any article in the last line. Of course, this may be only my personal reception as English is not my mother language.
Thank you for your comment.
Best regards
Iris
Kolejne gratulacje :))
OdpowiedzUsuńEddie,
Usuńdziękuję po raz kolejny :)
Pozdrawiam
Iris
Ahhh, that Merry-Go-Round; each new year... another ride!
OdpowiedzUsuń__Neat! _m
Dear Magyar
OdpowiedzUsuńthanks a lot for your perfect comment :)
Best wishes
Iris